Wednesday, November 10, 2010

Preview of my book.

Without further delay, here is an extremely rough draft of what i have thrown together from Volume 1 (Which, let me remind you, will be in chapters when I'm done).

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“Legends have been told about a boy, The Dove Master, who would send a swarm of doves to protect the people of all worlds. When there was an enemy coming to attack another world, the doves would take action. When the doves see the enemy, there is a ray of light that burst from the doves, like a huge, bright light bulb turned on inside of them. They would kill themselves and the enemy to protect their people. Legend says when one Dove master dies, another is born. When The Dove Master reaches the age of responsibility, he will have to take the stand and protect the people of all worlds. On your planet, that age is around 17 years old.” He looked at the ground.


There was silence for several minutes as he let this sink in.

“Wow” I said in a low whisper, “That is crazy.”

“Yes and its tr—“

“You want me to believe that” I cut off his last thought, growing louder with each word and turning red with anger, “I am not going to fall for that pathetic story about a Dove Master! You’re the most creative pervert I have ever met … The only one I’ve ever met. Now leave me alone!”

“Wait, you must believe me!”

“No, no I won’t. I’m going home.”

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Please be sure to leave me your constructive criticism so i can improve as an author/writer.

8 comments:

  1. Please, Be honest. What do you think? You won't get another Sneak Peek until my editor approves it.

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  2. take 2 ummm,you invent this story?or you excerpt from sources? from range 1-10 i could give 5

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  3. I created this and its from a BOOK IM WRITING (: I am sad that you gave it a 5/10 but i do accept all critism and this IS NOT the best part of my book, i just wanted to give you a sneak peek.

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  4. oh sori dislike 5, what come first in my mind is 8 maybe you dont like too much high.lol

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  5. Well its all varies Rolly, i have spent a lot of time on this book and it will have a final copy some day. Now i don't know if it will be in the Phillipines when i publish it, but maybe i'll be able to mail you a free copy. So you should go with your first instinct. This was the sneak peek i gave because it really gives you an idea of how cheesy the Dove master is and how i was trying to be clever with my hero of the book. Now as for the thicker plot contained within, i might give a snippet here or a snippet there, but if you really want to know what's going on in this book, you'll just have to wait for the final copy (Whenever that is) and hopfully, then maybe, you'll like the entire book as a whole with a rating of 8/10 :P

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  6. I have always loved writing, but i don't think writing will make me the kind of money to pay for the kind of house, car, electronics, ect... i want. So i'm gonna keep going for my goal of being a Graphic Design Artist. I will still write short stories, books, poetry, ect... and a few of my writings may even get published, but i wont be a full time author writing books; Thats just a side career.

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